Sunday, March 13, 2011

The Wait of Water - (Villanelle)

a shift in the tectonic plate
early morning siren screeches
across the ocean people wait

awakened to this twist of fate
tsunami warning, clear the beaches
a shift in the tectonic plate

minute by minute news update
listen to the experts' speeches
across the ocean people wait

all trying to anticipate
how far this devastation reaches
a shift in the tectonic plate

don’t live in a complacent state
lessons Mother Nature teaches
across the ocean people wait

as the local pastor preaches
although his prayers come too late
a shift in the tectonic plate
across the ocean people wait

18 comments:

  1. timely and well written. I have nominated you for a Versatile Blogger Award. Please visit http://lolamousedroppings.blogspot.com/2011/03/you-like-me-you-really-like-me.html if you would like to claim it. Congratulations and I love your writing!

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  2. Oh this is good. Current (no pun intended!). I've seen a lot of Villanelles around this week on various pages (I had to google it to find out about the structure.) That being said, this has to be the best one out there Charlie. Too bad the subject matter is just so damn tragic!

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  3. yes we wait as we are moved...
    great write for something that didn't feel right.

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  4. All we can do is wait and hope. I'm glad you wrote about it.

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  5. prayers too.

    well expressed sentiments.
    thanks for sharing.
    A++

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  6. nice but sad though thinking about it! here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/04/27/cheesecake/

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  7. I enjoyed reading your piece, but I believe God answers every prayer.

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  8. Thank you for the example of Villanelles and the education I received in reading about this poetic style. Mother Nature has indeed reared her head ... I project prayers for those affected and peace energy into the world rather than fear ~ becca

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  9. Well written villanelle and reminding of the Japanese people at this time

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  10. nice...perhaps for some they were not too late...read about the baby found this morning and i imagine that the miracle...

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  11. We cannot say enough about the tragedy - we can hope for tomorrow for these people and that the worst has occurred
    thanks for the Villanelle as well for One Shot

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  12. you know charlie - your refrains were resonating in my mind for some days...good to read it again

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  13. Nice villanelle - keeping japan foremost in my thoughts, as so many others are doing, and it is nice to see you contributing to that end. Nature can be wild, it can be unpredictable, and all too often we are helpless before the fury...it is a tragedy, what happened over there, but to see the response it has drawn from the world is heartwarming, in its own regard. Keep up the fine writing.

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  14. This is very poignant. It beautifully reflects the anguish felt on one side of the ocean and the anxiety felt on the other was events unfolded during the past week.

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  15. Timely and apt.. I could relate to it.. there is always hope..

    ॐ शांति ॐ
    Om Shanti Om
    May peace be… pray for People of Japan
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  16. Pray for all of us,including the people in Japan.Thank you Charlie.

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