early morning siren screeches
across the ocean people wait
awakened to this twist of fate
tsunami warning, clear the beaches
a shift in the tectonic plate
minute by minute news update
listen to the experts' speeches
across the ocean people wait
all trying to anticipate
how far this devastation reaches
a shift in the tectonic plate
don’t live in a complacent state
lessons Mother Nature teaches
across the ocean people wait
as the local pastor preaches
although his prayers come too late
a shift in the tectonic plate
across the ocean people wait
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ReplyDeleteOh this is good. Current (no pun intended!). I've seen a lot of Villanelles around this week on various pages (I had to google it to find out about the structure.) That being said, this has to be the best one out there Charlie. Too bad the subject matter is just so damn tragic!
ReplyDeleteamazing flow.
ReplyDeletekeep it up.
yes we wait as we are moved...
ReplyDeletegreat write for something that didn't feel right.
All we can do is wait and hope. I'm glad you wrote about it.
ReplyDeleteprayers too.
ReplyDeletewell expressed sentiments.
thanks for sharing.
A++
nice but sad though thinking about it! here's my potluck.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/04/27/cheesecake/
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your piece, but I believe God answers every prayer.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the example of Villanelles and the education I received in reading about this poetic style. Mother Nature has indeed reared her head ... I project prayers for those affected and peace energy into the world rather than fear ~ becca
ReplyDeleteWell written villanelle and reminding of the Japanese people at this time
ReplyDeletenice...perhaps for some they were not too late...read about the baby found this morning and i imagine that the miracle...
ReplyDeleteWonderful villanelle!
ReplyDeletean ordinary moment
We cannot say enough about the tragedy - we can hope for tomorrow for these people and that the worst has occurred
ReplyDeletethanks for the Villanelle as well for One Shot
you know charlie - your refrains were resonating in my mind for some days...good to read it again
ReplyDeleteNice villanelle - keeping japan foremost in my thoughts, as so many others are doing, and it is nice to see you contributing to that end. Nature can be wild, it can be unpredictable, and all too often we are helpless before the fury...it is a tragedy, what happened over there, but to see the response it has drawn from the world is heartwarming, in its own regard. Keep up the fine writing.
ReplyDeleteThis is very poignant. It beautifully reflects the anguish felt on one side of the ocean and the anxiety felt on the other was events unfolded during the past week.
ReplyDeleteTimely and apt.. I could relate to it.. there is always hope..
ReplyDeleteॐ शांति ॐ
Om Shanti Om
May peace be… pray for People of Japan
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Pray for all of us,including the people in Japan.Thank you Charlie.
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