Tuesday, January 11, 2011

Persistence





I tell her she is beautiful 
she doesn’t want to hear it 
and she has a lovely body 
but she doesn’t let me near it
I let her know she’s sexy 
with continuous insistence 
keep hoping that eventually 
I’ll wear down her resistance 
always tell her that I love her 
she puts up with my persistence 
and she says perhaps she loves me too 
but only from a distance 
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12 comments:

  1. Brian MillerMarch 8, 2011 at 7:27 PM

    oh man...i feel you on this one...distance...hmm...perhaps if you stay at it just a bit longer...smiles.

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  2. hedgewitchMarch 8, 2011 at 7:40 PM

    Nice use of rhyme and structure with a tongue in cheek style. Enjoyed it.

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  3. dustusMarch 9, 2011 at 5:19 AM

    Yes! Awesome wit and humor—I'm hoping this poem is an embellishment for the sake of the speaker.

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  4. UnknownMarch 9, 2011 at 9:15 AM

    I liked the playfulness of this one :)

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  5. AnonymousMarch 9, 2011 at 3:28 PM

    hehe great one Charlie. Clever wording

    Luke

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  6. AnonymousMarch 9, 2011 at 3:31 PM

    the pain of unrequited love! :)

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  7. PattiKenMarch 9, 2011 at 7:33 PM

    Good one, Charlie. Beneath the humorous tone of your words, I hear hear an echo of longing and regret, and those two most frustrating words in the English language, "if only."

    I notice that this is a post from January. I'm heading forward to see what has followed.

    P.S. Thank you for visiting my One Shot and for your very nice words. I am enormously flattered.

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  8. flaubertMarch 9, 2011 at 9:09 PM

    Nice rhyming, Charlie. I hope it is not true.

    Pamela

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  9. MarshyMarch 10, 2011 at 2:18 AM

    damn....sounds like marriage.....nice rhyme and felt the angst throughout..cheers pete

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  10. AnonymousMarch 10, 2011 at 6:53 AM

    Very nice rhyming...like everyone else said. I love this style of poetry. And an all to common situation unfortunantly.

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  11. Steve IsaakMarch 17, 2011 at 5:31 PM

    Oh, she's a tease, then - i.e., a vain waste of time?

    Well-written piece.

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  12. Ginny BrannanOctober 14, 2021 at 10:42 AM

    Had to go back to read this, and see the image that you added. Good writing. Sorry if I missed early on.

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